A large number of advertisements nowadays are now targeted at children. Many people say this has negative effects on children and should therefore be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argued that a huge proportion of
advertisements
these days are now targeted at young people. And they believe that there are various negative impacts on children
that should be prohibited. Personally, I partly disagree with this
idea.
On the one hand, it is true that commercials nowadays had an effect on children
. For example
, some products are promoted unhealthy foods and beverages which can lead to physical health problems in younger children
such
as obesity, diabetes and dyspepsia. Furthermore
, some products in terms of entertainment such
as toys and games are costly, which could cause conflict between parents
and their children
when children
asked for their playthings and parents
denied to purchasing them.
However
, I disagree with the idea that advertisements
should be banned. Because in the modern world, economic progress is a significant factor in developing countries. Advertisement is the primary need for promoting a company’s products to people. Banning advertisements
may reduce sales opportunities and lead to an economic downturn. In my opinion, a good parental role is more important to tackle this
problem, for example
, parents
should teach their children
how to spend their money and what to do in their free time. I think it is the easiest way to protect children
from advertisements
in the materialistic world.
In conclusion, While I recognize the possible disadvantages of a large proportion of commercials that harm children
both physical health and mental health, I consider it is the responsibility of parents
rather than companies to teach their offspring about financial planning and provide them with healthy foods.Submitted by beamisveryhappy on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
