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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the main problems people in cities face, and how can these problems be tackled?

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These days, there are numerous
people
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 who live in large cities.
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, The growth of
dwelling
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 is increasing rapidly, which is affecting
people
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 in many ways. There are some drawbacks to concern and need to tackle. In the essay, I will analyse these
problems
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, some possible solutions and conclude
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 personal opinion.
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 with, One of the main causes of the problem is air pollution.
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 conspicuously derives from their activities that continually introduce harmful contaminants into the air, indirectly causing health
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.
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, many vehicles in the city emit a lot of pollutants. The air was full of exhaust from traffic cars.
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, the rising population
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 increases the amount of waste, which can cause harm to the environment and lead to other
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 as disease. To tackle these issues,
people
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 should campaign to create a good conscience for coexistence. To illustrate, public transportation is the best way to decrease carbon dioxide and traffic on the road. There should be
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 in public transport systems to encourage more
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 to use
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.
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, on a part of waste
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,
people
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 should
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 refuse and recycle. It could help to reduce the amount of garbage and build
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good
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 in the city. In summary, it is undeniable that living in a big city faces lots of
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 and all of these are not something that can be solved overnight. Personally, I believe that if everyone helps each other to implement some of the suggestions I have made above,
people
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 will live happier and healthier in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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