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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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School plays a pivotal role in the overall development of a student. Some people think
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 should learn to be
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good
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 from a mere small
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. Yet, others object to
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 trend and they feel it is better we should let
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 enjoy their childhood. I, partially agree with the issue and will pen down certain important qualities to be a fabulous guardian.
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 with, school is the only place where
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 can learn family values and etiquette other than in their homes. Preaching
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 to be responsible parents at small
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 brings with it a bunch of benefits as they learn how to take care of babies which can only be seen in
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 who are from joint families.
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, in-country like India pupils born in a joint family is more responsible since they are minors as they see adults taking care of each and everything well.
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,
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 like to learn new things in school and introducing them to particular education will help them bear fruitful pursuits in their future.
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, taking into consideration their
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, it is so harsh on them to learn these things which they can learn in future by taking experience from others who will be in that phase at that time.
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, it is better to opt for things when the right time comes till
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 should only focus on their studies and overall development.
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, they can learn
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 values at their home, introducing a new subject to their curriculum will be an extra burden for them. A survey has shown that pressurising
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 with more and more subjects not only harms their childhood but
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 leaves a severe effect on their entire future.
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, if someone wants to be a good parent, one should inculcate qualities
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 as patience because to nurture a baby and make them confident, a parent has to be more patient so that they should know how to tackle their offspring without making them stubborn.
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, they should have plenty of time to spend with the
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 and should have optimistic behaviour to take their offspring in the right direction. To sum up, it is good to teach them family values at minor
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 but to a certain extent as in their growth ,years it is better for
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 should focus on their development.
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