Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A few people believe that
advertisements
inspire us to purchase unnecessary items
while
others say that
advertisements
inform us about the new items that we could actually be benefitted from. Well,
this
is the power of
advertisements
.
This
essay will discuss both views. It is very common that we get caught in
advertisements
and end up buying things that we don't need
thus
spending a lot of money.
For example
, we end up buying a phone, even if our old phone works perfectly well because we don't want to feel left out and try to keep up with the trend. We have not only spent lavishly, but we have
also
replaced a perfectly working phone. On the flip side, in
this
age and time things are
getting changed
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rapidly,
we
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and we
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have to constantly upgrade ourselves with the latest technology.
Advertisements
play an important role here by informing us all about the latest in news.
For example
, the newer
cars
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car
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models have increased safety and reduced fuel consumption
thus
making them better than the previous/old ones. In my opinion, I feel that
advertisements
have both advantages and disadvantages and using them wisely is under each person's control.
Advertisements
can give a hole in your pocket or make you
take
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make
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wise decisions and you will have to take control of it smartly.
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task response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses the question prompt and reflects a clear understanding of both viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
Overall, your essay has good coherence and cohesion, but make sure to use transition words and phrases to connect ideas and ensure a clear flow of information.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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