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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
The chart shows the
amount
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 of
goods
 transported in the UK in
period
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a period
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 of 28
years
 from 1974 to 2002 by 4 different means of
tranportation
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transportation
. The numbers are given in millions of tonnes. There is an overall increasing tendency in the quantities of
good
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goods
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 moved. All modes of transport transported significantly more weight in 2002 than in 1974, except for
goods
 shipped by rail, which figures are roughly the same in those
years
.
Additionally
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 most of the
goods
 were transported by road and pipeline is the mean of transportation that moved the least amount of weight in the 28
years
 period. Generally speaking, the
amount
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 of
goods
 that travelled by road increased gradually until around 1995 when it rose abruptly from less than 80 million
of
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tonnes to approximately 95
millions
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 in less than half a decade.
On the other hand
, water's figures
growvery
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grow very
 rapidly after 1978 the
plateaud
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plateau
plateaued
plateaus
 and dropped in 1999 but
it
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 rose to a new maximum in the
last
years
. Good transported by rail
instead
 gradually fell most of the time but it recovered after 1995. The quantities of
goods
 moved by pipelines slowly grew
on
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 the entire period.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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