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Dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

#dangers #people #habit #society
Smoking
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 epidemic is a serious problem across the globe. Even
people
 who smoke are aware of its hazards, they still find it hard to quit as they become addicted to it.
This
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this
 issue and what can be implemented in order to decrease
smoking
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 rate in communities. Many factors contribute to
people
 being unable to give up smoking despite knowing how perilous it is. The most profound one is a medical condition called
an
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addiction
. A person who smokes regularly develops nicotine dependence –
addictive
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 substance found in tobacco.
Furthermore
, whenever a victim wants to break
this
 unhealthy habit, he starts suffering from anxiety as well as anger all of which are characteristics of
addiction
, which in its turn puts a
further
 strain on the existing difficulty.
For example
, the survey conducted recently by BBC
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 has revealed that the majority of smokers voted for the afterwards problems due to
addiction
 to be their main concern
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 not quitting smoking.
On the other hand
, a myriad of effective solutions could be fruitful in coping with
people
 who smoke. The most effective measure here is increasing cigarettes taxes, which should be regulated by
government
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.
In other words
, should the cost of cigarettes be higher, it will deter would-be smokers. Take Singapore,
for example
, where the proportion of smokers was growing considerably and with the help of tobacco and cigarette tax authorities were able to control
this
 pressing issue. In conclusion, while
addiction
 is the main reason for
people
 not giving up smoking,
this
 issue can be tackled to a great extent if principals increase the tax which is imposed on cigarettes, leading to
people
 being unwilling to spend money on them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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