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Write about the following topic: In many countries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspaper. What are the reasons for this? What would be done to solve the problem? Write at least 250 words. You should spend 40 minutes on this task.

#topic #countries #people #waste #materials #bottles #newspaper #minutes
Reclycling
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Recycling
 is the best way that
people
 can reduce the population. But
someone
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some
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 think that
recycle
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recycling
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 the waste from home isn’t enough. The only solution that
want
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wants
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 to increase recycling is
goverment
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government
need
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needs
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 to take part in
and
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it and
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 make it a legal requirement. For me
goverment
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government
need
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needs
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 to create a good
policy
 that can bring
a
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apply
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benefit
for
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apply
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they
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them
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 and make a law that each family have
amount
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the amount
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 of waste that
need
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needs
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 to
recycle
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be recycled
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 each month.
Goverment
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Government
need
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needs
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 to create a
policy
 that can give a little benefit
for
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to
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 them.
Goverment
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Government
 can create a
policy
 that each plastic bottle or metal can
that
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apply
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can bring some little income for their family or they can make a point like how
much kilogram
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many kilograms
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 of
trash
 they can trade
a
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for a
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toy,
dish
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or dish
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,… For
in
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apply
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example, in Germany,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 always
print
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prints
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 a little price
llike
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like
 0.25 euro
in
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on
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plastic
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a plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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,
can
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cans
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,
cotton
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and cotton
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,… That
also
 can take a little
of
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apply
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money from
recycle
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recycled
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trash
. So
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 can use that way to increase
number
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the number
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 of
people
 that recycle.
In addition
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 can force how many of
trash
 that
need
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needs
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 to
recycle
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be recycled
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 in
family
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families
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 per month.
Goverment
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Government
 can make
a laws
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laws
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 that can be 1 family
need
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needs
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 to recycle how many
kilo
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kilos
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 of
trash
. If they don’t do that, they can be
pulishment
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punishment
a
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apply
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huge money.
For instance
, in my province, they said that each month we need to bring
the
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apply
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1 kilo or more
recycle
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of recycled
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trash
 to recycle company. If we don’t do that, we need to pay 1 million dong for one time.
That is
also
 a good way to make
people
rycle
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cycle
recycle
 more.
To sum up
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
need
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needs
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 to create a
policy
 and a law that can both force
people
recycle
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to recycle
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 more and can bring a benefit or another income for
they
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them
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. Through
this
, I want everybody both
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 and each
invidual
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individual
 can have a better awareness about
recycle
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recycling
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 to make
environment
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the environment
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more clearly
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clearer
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 and less population.
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task response
Ensure to clearly understand and address all aspects of the question. Currently, the essay partially addresses the task by providing suggestions to encourage recycling, but it lacks depth in exploring the reasons why people do not recycle.
coherence cohesion
Distinctly outline each paragraph with clear topic sentences and supporting details. The essay lacks clear paragraphing, which affects its logical flow and makes it harder for the reader to follow the argument.
overall
Proofread the essay for grammatical errors, more complex sentence structures, and vocabulary use to enhance clarity and coherence. This makes the essay easier to read and understand.
task response
The essay attempts to provide specific solutions to enhance recycling efforts, such as implementing government policies and laws.
task response
Examples, like the German policy on recycling and local practices, are used to support the argument, showing an attempt to relate solutions to real-world practices.

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