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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion?

#money #time
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Nowadays most public is running for amount
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 of taking their free
time
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. in my opinion ,work-life balance is more important than a wealthy lifestyle. in
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 essay, some citizens believe that having more
money
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 and less free
time
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 is better than earning less
money
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 and having more free
time
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 .I will explain both views and I will give my opinion on
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 statement. on one hand, most
people
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 are spending a lot of
time
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 their work to earn more
money
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 and they think funds will give them happiness and wealthy citizens will respect them more but they cannot spend more
time
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 with family and friends.
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, they easily get health problems like blood pressure and diabetes compared to fewer tasks
people
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.
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, they cannot enjoy their lives and get more stressed about their work.
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,most
people
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 compare their life with big celebrities and wealthy
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 to lead a better lifestyle. on other hand, some public thinks that work-life balance is important to lead a better life because they can spend most of their quality
time
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 with their family and friends.
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,they do not get any disease easily and they control their stress and do not burn out.
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, they can do their leisure
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 with some other activities like sports,art activities and they can travel and explore it will give relax to their lives and more happiness.
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,most
people
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 choose their lifeless chores and more
time
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. In conclusion,
money
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 cannot buy happiness and health issues and we have to take care of our lives with fewer projects and we have to balance our work life and take more leisure
time
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. in my opinion,
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 of doing heavy tasks take a long free
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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