Car ownership has increased so rapidly over past thirty years that may cities in the world are now on big traffic jam.

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ownership number has surged over the past thirty years. In
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essay, we’ll discuss how a large number of cars can cause a major
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jam
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in cities and how government should encourage
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to reduce using their cars. It’s the fact that
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been skyrocketed over the past thirty years. One reason is that using a
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is more convenient than using public
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. Public
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could be
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and have more risk exposing to COVID-19.
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, the bus is not on time. In order to plan something important, it is necessary to spare plenty of time. If it’s a routine plan, It’s going to be hard.
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, planning the time to go to work. Going to work by bus could take as long as an hour whereas going to work by
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could take only 30 minutes. It can make you tired in a long run. As the
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road increase,
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road is not constructed as fast as the increase of
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.
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, the cities in the world are now one big
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jam
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. In order to solve the
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problem,
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should convince
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to use their cars less. One way to perform is by making
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public
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more reliable. When
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public
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is convenient, more
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will use it.
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, a great deal of money should spend
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to subsidize the
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using them. If public
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is better than owning a
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, more
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will use it and the
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jam
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problem will be solved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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