The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourst facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourst facilities.
The two maps illustrated the great changes before and after the construction of tourist facilities on the
island
.
Overall
, to attract more tourists, they established a restaurant,
accommodations
,
reception
, pier etc.
Moreover
, the original plants and a beach
were
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remained to provide relaxation for them. Before the construction, we can see there are some tropical plants on the
island
, and a beach located in the northwest corner of the
island
. Sea was at the north and south ends of
this
island
. After many years of construction, there was a significant change on
this
island
. They provided a swimming area near the beach, and there is a footpath leading to
accommodations
for tourists to live and relax. In the east direction of
accommodations
, a
reception
surrounded by a vehicle track located there, which people who live here can easily get access
.
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Besides
that, there are more
accommodations
in the east wing of the
reception
. In the north, a restaurant is located on the edge of the
island
where travellers can get food and snacks. A pier was built on the south side of the
reception
, leading by the vehicle track, where visitors can row a boat.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, accommodations, reception with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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