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People nowadays sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think ‎is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals and people ‎around them?‎

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 letter to bring to highlight the service and
time related
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 problems faced with the bus that I board every day to reach my office.
Firstly
, I would like to highlight the buses often
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 not reach on time since it waits for people coming late to the stop.
Secondly
, some of the air conditioners in the bus
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 not work properly making it very stuffy.
Lastly
,
although
 the staff members are well behaved
but
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they are not ready to take any
actions
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 for the troubles caused by the passengers. They are dependent on head office to solve even small issues. The solution recommended for the
first
 problem is that the bus should not wait for any passenger who comes late to the stop. Please get all the Air conditioners checked and replace the ones which are working properly. Please train your staff members, make a process and define problems that can be handled at their end and look for solutions for bigger issues. I am looking forward
for
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 the suggested solutions and
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 the passengers have a happy journey to their destinations. Yours sincerely AS
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