Watching too much television reduces people’s capacity to think for themselves. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

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Nowadays,
Television
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is the main source of entertainment. And
people
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watch
TV
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for server programs. I agree with
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statement that watching
television
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is
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has
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increase
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so many positive ideas
as well as
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created some drawbacks that affect
people
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's
life
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. my essay will examine
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point in my upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, humans are watching
television
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to reduce their tension and feel better but after watching too much
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they feel stressed.
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, using the
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for a long time,
people
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cannot concentrate properly on one thing. if they are doing something
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after sometimes they feel
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.
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, They did not think for themselves.
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, he or she did a project and did not think about themselves because of watching too much
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.
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, they complete their project with the help of the internet.
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,
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would lead to creating mental problems
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as memory
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decreasing by 4 to 5 per cent and brain atrophy.
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. At present days, Nations like to learn from online sources like
television
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,
computer
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computers
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and so on. We can see that so many
educations related
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education-related
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,
Science related
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science-related
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shows
on
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are on
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the
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TV
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.
Consequently
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, By watching that kind of show on
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,
people
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get knowledge about that topic and it is helpful in their
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.
Furthermore
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, Humans who watch
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after
their
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work or study, feel relaxed or sometimes
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sit with their family and enjoy watching entertaining programs on
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. In conclusion, I believe that,
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watching
TV
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people
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gain so much knowledge.
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Although
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However
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, watching too much
television
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declines
people
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's thinking ability.
Submitted by Drashti satani on

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