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Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The government of various nations owes the citizens a duty to provide substantial medical services for free.
Although
 some may argue, I am in total support of
this
 view.
This
 essay will provide detailed reasons why countries should aid the people with free medical treatments.
Firstly
, health is wealth and a fundamental inalienable right of all persons. With
this
 in mind, everyone is entitled to a healthy life which can be achieved through the provision of primary healthcare services for free. By so doing, poor masses will get medical attention and be treated
accordingly
 without worrying about how to pay bills. A healthy society is productive and contributes immensely to economical and social growth .
However
, if the populace cannot get basic medical treatment, an epidemic may erupt which in turn will cost political administrators a huge amount of money to eradicate .
For example
, glaucoma, cataract and blurry vision can cause eye blindness but an early diagnosis can prevent it.
Moreover
, the size and amenities of healthcare may vary from country to country depending on their capabilities.
In addition
, modern treatment might not be available due to the exorbitant rate. Despite
this
, saving a life with basic therapy cannot be overemphasized.
Therefore
, provisions should be made for costly dialysis, surgery and operations for the impoverished, whilst average citizens pay for
such
 expensive medicine. The government
on the other hand
 will generate revenues from payments made to aid less-privileged people in attaining better fitness goals. In conclusion, well-being is paramount to all and sundry. Regardless of the latest treatment, each country should furnish citizens with free medical services to reduce the widespread diseases and sicknesses that can plague a nation.
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