Inventors are not as important to society as doctors.

Society is being highly affected in positive ways by both
inventors
and
doctors
Doctors
are more important than
inventors
. I do not agree with that statement. I believe many people find they can be more beneficial with
inventors
. In
this
technological era, everything is
modernated
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moderated
modernized
. Every professional field is up to date and it is getting more competitive with
new
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a new
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creation
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creations
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.
First
of all, communication
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today is easier than that
of
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before Since phones and text messages were invented, people do not need to rely on letters to keep
contact
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with each other. That means the ways of keeping
contact
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nowadays save much time.
For
example
, ancestors had to use telegram that took about a month to be received by
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other
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one but now people do not need to wait and messages are received in a short time.
Secondly
, travelling is more convenient
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new vehicles like
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an aeroplane
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aeroplane
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aeroplanes
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. Travellers are more comfortable and less tired unlike before when ships and trains were the only ones for travelling and transportation.
For
example
, it took several months to wait for someone's return.
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good point is related
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the
internet
. Websites and
internet
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the internet
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are crucial for
this
century
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in learning. Students can find quickly on the
internet
what they have
desire
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the desire
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to learn.
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can do and learn everything where there is the
internet
.
For
example
, students can do self-studying in certain
professionals
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without taking any classes like drawing and cooking. It can reduce the budgets used in those.
Finally
, the essential things about public health are
also
advantages of
inventors
.
Equipments
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used in
hospital
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hospitals
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and
laboratory
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laboratories
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are always updated according to the trend.
For
example
, pregnant mothers can know whether the baby is
girl
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or
boy
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and almost all
of
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the diseases can be found in
laboratory
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the laboratory
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. In conclusion,
although
doctors
and
inventors
are vital for
sociery
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society
, the benefits of
inventors
outweigh the benefits of
doctors
in
this
era.
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