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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In our modern time, it is common for young
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work
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travel
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 before attending
university
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. From some
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’s perspective, it is better for the
students
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 to provide
work
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 experience and that can lead to better career selection. According
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 it is very important for
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 to join the
university
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 for education.
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 the following. There are many reasons that encourage young
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 to
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 or
travel
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 before attending
university
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.
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 of all, the
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 could discover what they really like to do in the future.
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, when
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work
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, they learn to deal with problems in different kinds of situations.
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, when
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travel
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, they have many opportunities to engage with other
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 and deal with a variety of life situations
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when they go abroad, they have the stressful parts are not knowing anyone, missing old friends, and dealing by themselves.
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, the
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 who used to
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 as waiters obtained many skills
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 as managing time and
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 communication skills and
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 would help them perform well when they join the
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, these experiences assist
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 to solve the problems that they will face once they begin working.
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, there are some drawbacks to working or travelling before joining the
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 possible that they start to like their life outside the school and they may never go back to attend college. And
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, the working and travelling have to use a lot of
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 to go because that want to hire an agency to provide a lot of processes.
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, most young
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 want to
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travel
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overseas
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 as in England but they cannot contact
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the company by themselves so they have to spend lots of
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 to hire an agency but sometimes
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 useless.
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,
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money money
 should use to support education because if
students
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 attend
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 they will learn the
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necessary
 knowledge for a job in the future. In conclusion, if
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 take a gap year , they could gain invaluable experience.
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, they may
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 use a lot of
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 for the process to go and
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 for attending the
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 is more beneficial.
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, it is necessary to join
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 for young
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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