Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
It is a common belief that all
of
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zoos
are cruel and should be closed down. Add an article
the zoos
However
, I firmly believe that zoos
are an efficiently
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efficient
tool
that can protecting
wild Change the verb form
protect
be protecting
animals
from illegal hunting.
On the one hand, zoos
generally bring up wild
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the wild
a wild
animal
in a limited space, which is Fix the agreement mistake
animals
effects
negatively to Correct your spelling
affects
mental
and physical health of Add an article
the mental
animals
. Natural
habitat is the best habitat for growing wild Correct article usage
The natural
animals
because it has a variety of spieces
and a large environment. Correct your spelling
species
Therefore
, is a better environment for the physically and metally
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mentally
growing
of Replace the word
growth
animal
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animals
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instead
in stead
of Correct your spelling
instead
zoos
. In addition
, zoos
usually have fences, which makes the habitat of wild animal
become limited and Fix the agreement mistake
animals
animal
can be uncomfortable, effects to Fix the agreement mistake
animals
the
growth of them. According to a Change the word
their
reccent
survey in the US, penguins living in Correct your spelling
recent
a
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zoos
a zoo
zoos
have worse physically and mentally condition
than penguins Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
live
in Antarctica.
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living
However
, I support the idea that zoos
are an efficiently
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efficient
tool
that can protecting
wild Change the verb form
protect
be protecting
animals
from illegal hunting. Many endangered animals
such
as African elephants or Asia tigers are being extinct due to illegal hungting
. Correct your spelling
hunting
Zoos
are the tool
that can resolved
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resolve
this
problem because it
can Correct pronoun usage
they
isolated
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isolate
be isolated
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and endanger
endanger
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endangered
spieces
from Correct your spelling
species
natural
environment, which can be easily hunted by illegal animal hunters. A study in South Africa has demonstrated that from the appearance of Add an article
the natural
zoos
, endanger animals
became more
safer from illegal hunting. And Change the word
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zoos
is
the best method Change the verb form
are
to
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for
protecting
wild Wrong verb form
protect
animals
and they generally provide a
good condition for their growth.
To sum up, while it is apparent that Correct article usage
apply
zoos
can effect
negatively to Correct your spelling
affect
mental
and physical health of wild Add an article
the mental
animals
, it is undenieable
that they are an Correct your spelling
undeniable
efficiently
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efficient
tool
that can protecting
wild Change the verb form
protect
be protecting
animals
from illegal hunting.Submitted by nguyenanhngocphan on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite