Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

It is a common belief that all
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zoos
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are cruel and should be closed down.
However
, I firmly believe that
zoos
are an
efficiently
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tool
that can
protecting
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wild
animals
from illegal hunting. On the one hand,
zoos
generally bring up
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animal
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in a limited space, which is
effects
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negatively to
mental
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and physical health of
animals
.
Natural
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habitat is the best habitat for growing wild
animals
because it has a variety of
spieces
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species
and a large environment.
Therefore
, is a better environment for the physically and
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growing
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of
animal
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in stead
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of
zoos
.
In addition
,
zoos
usually have fences, which makes the habitat of wild
animal
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animals
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become limited and
animal
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can be uncomfortable, effects to
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growth of them. According to a
reccent
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recent
survey in the US, penguins living in
a
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zoos
have worse physically and mentally
condition
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than penguins
live
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in Antarctica.
However
, I support the idea that
zoos
are an
efficiently
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tool
that can
protecting
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wild
animals
from illegal hunting. Many endangered
animals
such
as African elephants or Asia tigers are being extinct due to illegal
hungting
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hunting
.
Zoos
are the
tool
that can
resolved
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this
problem because
it
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can
isolated
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and endanger
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endanger
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spieces
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species
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environment, which can be easily hunted by illegal animal hunters. A study in South Africa has demonstrated that from the appearance of
zoos
, endanger
animals
became
more
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safer from illegal hunting. And
zoos
is
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the best method
to
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protecting
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wild
animals
and they generally provide
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good condition for their growth. To sum up, while it is apparent that
zoos
can
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negatively to
mental
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the mental
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and physical health of wild
animals
, it is
undenieable
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undeniable
that they are an
efficiently
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tool
that can
protecting
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protect
be protecting
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wild
animals
from illegal hunting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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