Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Increasing offences by juvenile delinquents have contributed to an unsafe environment for
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. Nowadays, it has led to a debate whether minority lawbreakers should be tried in court as adults or treated differently because of their age. I strongly dispute
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idea since these young offenders can be still given the opportunity to reform themselves.
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essay will delve into these viewpoints with relevant examples in support of my opinion.
Firstly
,
adolescent
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adolescents
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doing
violation
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violations
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due to
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peer pressures and gangs.
Besides
, the violence in the media can attract their attitudes and behaviours. Our young are like a car with a great accelerator, but a weak brake. They do not think before they act. Sometimes, they do not understand what
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right is and what
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wrong is because of their
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, as a consequence, they do the same wrong works again.
However
, their evils should not be forgotten. So, in
this
situation, if we sent them to the teen rehabilitation Centre to learn and teach the social value and anti-corruption lessons
instead
of jail,
then
they may be understood their fault and felt sorry for their misdeeds.
For instance
, a child transgression magazine showed their report that about 75
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teenager
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offenders came back,
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normal life after their recovery sessions. It is said that bad behaviours are easier to change when a person is
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.
Secondly
, our youth law does not allow putting the pubescent behind the jail, and I believe that trying
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in court may actually outcome in bigger problems. In a cell, there are lots of
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inside there. If we give our youngest, a harsher penalty and put them in these
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,
then
this
prison may expose these kids to a hardened culprit who may act as a professional malefactor.
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, a survey
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code department shows that
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minority wrongdoer who releases the jail makes a lot of threatening
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than those who came to the junior recovery Centre.
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conclusion, we do not get them back
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their normal life.
On the other hand
, those people say that the teen offender must be punished like a man; they believe
this
because many countries pay no full attention to young crimes, for
this
, they become more dangerous than any other felons do.
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the Information Computer Technology crime department indicated that now a day, many teenagers
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in cybercrime, child abuse,
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misdeeds and many
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anti-social activities
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the
last
few years.
Nevertheless
, the junior lawbreakers feel guilty for their misdeeds. For
this
, if they get harsher penalties like older,
then
they realized their faults and
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to break the laws.
Besides
, these treatments will make our civil life safe and peaceful. Much research said that the modified law would change the situation and decreased
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re-offence cases. To sum up, we should hate transgression, not criminals. Time and adult persons negatively influence
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generation. So that they need proper attention to give up their misdemeanours, not to harsher
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.
This
will curb our crimes.
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