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Task 2: Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 by juvenile delinquents have contributed to an unsafe environment for
society
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. Nowadays, it has led to a debate, some
people
 think that young
people
 who commit serious
crimes
 should be punished in the same way as adults, while many
people
 disagree with that statement. in my opinion, I strongly agree ưith
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 idea,
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and the
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 following essay will delve into these viewpoints with relevant examples in support of my opinion. In many serious
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 that I have read about, there are so many teenagers who can understand what they have done is wrong, and most of them
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didn't
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. Even worse, there
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 some
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 that the young criminals
prenteded
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pretended
 they regret
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what they have done, faked their tears, claimed that they
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were
to
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 young to
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 those animal actions. and when they got freehand, they
continued
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 commit even more brutal
crimes
.
therefore
, I believe that there should be no excuse, young
people
 who
commited
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committed
commit
crimes
 are criminals and we should not let their age continue to allow them to be on our streets, living as our
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, and in many instances, committing more
crimes
. I believe that teens should be held accountable for their actions and tried as adults.
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