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travellers and business people often come into contact with other cultures briefly. what are the main advantages and disadvantages of doing so?

#travellers #business #people #contact #cultures
Nowadays
make
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making
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a connection
the connection
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connection
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connections
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 with others is important because humans are living in
social
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society
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. Nobody can deny that know
culture
 is
nessecerry
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Lessenberry
 for
person
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the person
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 who
want
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travell
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travel
 or
make
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makes
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bussiness
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business
 there. One
possitive
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positive
aspects
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 is that knowing
rules
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the rules
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 of any
culture
 avoid
habit
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habits
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 more
politly
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politely
, despite the number of rules that cultures have, it is better to know the main of them. and another
pros
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 is that
the
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most of the people who live with
culture
 have some traditional habit which they are doing them without any reason. If a
bissiness
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business
 man wants to have a good deal, He should
finds
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 traditional cultures which are
help
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helpful
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to
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him to
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 sign a better contract.
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, a
bussiness
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business
 man knows
that
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apply
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when is the best month
for
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to
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 sell black clothes because
on
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in
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 that area they have some regin events which they should wear black. yet another benefit is traveller could have more fun and find the way of
entertainent
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entertainment
 on that
culture
 or area.
Although
turrists
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tourists
terrorists
 can go to many places for having fun, some of them are more interested.
For instance
, some traditional
exahibitions
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exhibitions
 were exict that happened for a few days in some month. It is clear that
find
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finding
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 some
culture
 about where you want to
travell
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travel
 or make money is important,
altough
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although
 learning
cultures
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about cultures
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 need to spend time, It is better to select the most invaluable one.
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