In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society ?

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competition occurs

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the academic environment and provides

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poor children. Some parents

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decide to compel a duty to their offspring which is an added education after school. Because of

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, I strongly disagree that

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unnecessary study is required for kids. In

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youngsters and

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. On the one hand, the negative effects on children can be seen in

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situations.

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, an excessively learning

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might be capable of abandoning opportunity, that kids can be admired to plan their

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.

Consequently

, the long-term problems will cause the worst results to the future development of society because those compelled students do not know the exact occupation that they prefer and become jobless people

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, It seems to be sensible that extra classes especially harm the bright future of youngsters and the social improvement.

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, there still be optimistic sides of an added education which is able to hardly

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.

For instance

,

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alternative study can obviously send boys or girls to a famous institute. Unfortunately, it will be the nightmare of those kids who just knew their dream future after the admission that the current academic is enabled to provide their achievement properly.

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, dear offspring apparently require some free time to discover themselves. In conclusion, the two sides of the argument illustrate that extra classes have

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both positive and negative

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on children and sociality. Despite

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, it seems acceptable that less free time cannot offer enough opportunity to admire themselves for a job and affects overwhelmed pressure

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their mind. Perhaps, the solution might be a conversation between parents and youngsters to clarify the suitable academic path.