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Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it positive or negative development?

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In recent years, more couples have tended to spend a large sum of
money
 on employing professional companies to organize their
weddings
, with the five-stars hotel and the video team. In the following, I will explain why it is happening and argue that it is a negative development. I argue that
weddings
 have become more grand and expensive as
people
 are more materialistic in current society. They do not find inner and spiritual
satisfaction
 important; rather, their
satisfaction
 comes from possessing more
money
 and luxury products. To maximize their happiness, they show off their richness to friends and families by having grand and expensive
weddings
. I suggest that
this
 change in the social atmosphere is a negative development.
Firstly
,
people
 falsely believe that successful marriage is materialistic as their
weddings
. They have to provide their partners with
money
, houses, and cars to maintain their relationship.
However
, the crucial point of a successful marriage should be love and promise. The couples truly love each other and promise to live together regardless of any future difficulties.
Secondly
,
people
 wrongly believe that inner and spiritual
satisfaction
 is not essential. It is true that our life cannot lack
money
, though our happiness
also
 comes from inner and spiritual
satisfaction
 that
money
 cannot buy.
For instance
, completing a marathon competition can
also
 make us feel satisfied and joyful, yet we can only achieve
this
 by practising hard. In conclusion, I point out that todays'
weddings
 reflect
people
's materialistic character and that
this
 is a negative development as
people
 misunderstand the true meaning of successful marriage and happiness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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