Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

Hey, Guzal, you missed a snowflake!’ said my friend, who had already caught 5 of them. The nurse called us and we returned to the kindergarten to have an ecology talk where we were told about the problem of the Aral
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for the
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emotional
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child, I persuaded my groupmates to collectively take buckets with water and travel to the
sea
to fill it up.
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was the time when I started to combat
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climate change and its consequences. I am 16, do not catch snowflakes because
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has become a rare occasion and the
Sea
now is just a mixture of sand and salt.
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, I still value the importance of teamwork.
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why I founded the project aimed to raise awareness about climate change among primary and secondary school students and
that is
why I participate in weekly ‘
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’ to gather the rubbish and recycle it afterwards. It is not enough though.
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like-minded people and
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some ideas about the problem of climate change and how
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can be tackled.
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I am concerned about the rivers all over Asia that may disappear
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the Aral
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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