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it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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Learning the difference between right and wrong is one of the most important concepts, which is crucial to be well-understood.
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 is considered to be an effective method in
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 regard
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 not supported by psychologists, especially physical
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. In my opinion,
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 the best method to modify
children
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's behaviour is encouragement sometimes
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 is essential.
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, parents and school authorities must seriously be restricted from using physical
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, while they should be allowed to fine
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 appropriately.
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 has always been considered a negative form of treating
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, which is necessary. Improvements in psychology released that it can have detrimental effects on one's mental health and well-being.
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 studies, helped specialists to split
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 into different groups and define the best method of treatment for each group.
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research at Toronto university showed that adverse effects of
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 on
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 under the age of three can ruin their self-confidence and trust while it is beneficial for teenagers aged 7 to 13. Similar researches,
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, provide evidence that
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 is not a completely right or wrong reaction to
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's misbehaviour and its application depends on different parameters. Punishments
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 have different categories. Physical
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 is the worst one which is restricted by law in many developed countries to protect
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's rights. In my point of view, still, some sorts of
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 have remarkably constructive effects,
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 as forcing
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 to work together or take part in school duties or cleaning their classroom. These kinds of
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fine not only make them more flexible and adaptable but
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 helps them to learn many soft skills while thinking about their negative behaviour. In conclusion,
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's
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 has different negative and positive influences. Parents and teachers must be educated to treat different
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 according to their differences unless
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 and even encouragement can affect them
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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