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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language has serious social and practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion?

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Nowadays, there is a growing tendency for people to live abroad and have to speak a foreign
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.While,many people consider that
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 phenomenon causes a lot of social and daily problems,personally,
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 believe that there are always two sides of a coin that should be carefully considered. On the one hand, the majority of people who decide to live abroad,
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face a multitude of problems due to the fact that they do not speak their mother tongue.
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, the communication problem is a case in point, as an increasing percentage of immigrants are not acquire a good command of a foreign
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. As a consequence, they are difficult to be hired for a job, rent a house as well as cover their daily expenses ,since they are lacking in speaking fluently
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language
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, many of these families raise their own children who face a lot of social burdens during
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 immigration ,as they should study in a foreign school. Specifically, they
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uncapable
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incapable
 to be adopted in a new environment as well as find friends.
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 but not least, there is a wide range of
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incidents which get bullied
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 environment.
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, it is undeniable that learning a foreign
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 has certain advantages.
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 of all, immigrants have the opportunity to learn the
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 naturally, as they would their mother tongue.
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 since especially children have the ability to reproduce the sounds of the foreign
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 as a native speaker
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 with minimum effort.
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, speaking a foreign
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 is a great attempt to bridge cultural gaps and enhance
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interculturalism.
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, a considerable percentage of Albanian immigrants in Greece ,having learned the
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, achieved
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 important relationship bonds with the
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 citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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