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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #countries
EDUCATION OPPORTUNITIES HAVE ENHANCED IN RECENT YEARS. IT HAS BEEN ARGUED WHETHER BEING A LEARNER IN ABROAD COUNTRIES HAS MORE ADVANTAGES THAN DISADVANTAGES.
ALTHOUGH
 LIVING FAR AWAY FROM FAMILY AND FRIENDS DURING COLLEGE YEARS HAS SOME ADVERSE EFFECTS ON
PEOPLE
SUCH
 AS SUFFERING FROM HOMESICKNESS, I BELIEVE THAT
THIS
 EXPERIENCE PRESENTS UNIQUE OPPORTUNITIES TO STUDENTS.
FIRST
 AND FOREMOST, BEING A STUDENT IN AN ABROAD COUNTRY CAN TEACH ABOUT FOREIGN CULTURES TO THEM AND AS A CONSEQUENCE, IT CAN HELP TO EXPAND THEIR VISIONS AND NETWORKS ALONG THE WAY. NEEDLESS TO SAY, ENHANCED VISION AND NETWORK EASE
PEOPLE
 TO FIND A JOB THAT THEY WANT AND PRESENT THEM WITH COUNTLESS OPPORTUNITIES. TO EXPAND,
PEOPLE
 WRITING IN THEIR RESUMES ABOUT THEIR EXPERIENCES IN DIFFERENT COUNTRIES CAN SEEM MORE EMPLOYABLE TO HUMAN RESOURCES. IT MEANS THAT THE PERSON IS CONFIDENT AND CAN COMPETE WITH CONFLICTS.
SECONDLY
, LIVING ON THEIR OWN FAR AWAY FROM THEIR FAMILIES AND RELATIVES MAY PREPARE
PEOPLE
 FOR
ADULT
 LIFE. TO ILLUSTRATE, WHEN YOUNGSTERS HAVE TO LIVE ON THEIR OWN DURING THEIR UNIVERSITY YEARS, THEY HAVE TO LEARN TO SUPPLY THEIR DAILY NEEDS AND COMPETE WITH CHALLENGES AT EARLY AGE.
AS A RESULT
, IT CAN HELP THEM BE SELF-SUFFICIENT IN THEIR
ADULT
 LIVES. TO SUM UP, STUDYING IN A FOREIGN COUNTRY HAS UNDOUBTEDLY PROS EVEN THOUGH IT CAN BE QUITE HARD. IT MAY BE CHALLENGING BUT IN TERMS OF PREPARING FOR
ADULT
 LIFE IT OUTWEIGHS TO STUDYING IN MY HOMETOWN. BECAUSE IT GIVES A CHANCE TO KNOW NEW CULTURES AND HABITS
IN ADDITION
 TO BEING A SIMULATION OF THE
ADULT
 LIFE.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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