the use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The evolution of
technology
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has been critically influenced positively and negatively the lives of human beings, more specifically the development of youngsters. In my opinion, I definitely believe that
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overall is dwindling the potential of children of being creative, especially if they are compared to
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in the past. I feel
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of all,
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is making the lives of
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too easy leading them to think less than toddlers in the past. Nowadays children have access to the internet which is wonderful but on the other ,hand they find all the information that they need with the simple fact of put a
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the computer, decreasing the chance of
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expand their imagination and
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.
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is a compelling sample of
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seven years old and he usually
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to use my computer when he
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to draw pictures or do some assignation from
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school, and two weeks ago I
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to him the use of the computer and I put pressure on him to elaborate a homework where the teacher was asking to make a big portrait using paints and
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, but he could not do it since he was used to
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ideas from
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rather than thinking by himself and being creative.
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is affecting the development of
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our
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.
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, the upcoming young society
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more time on social media, smartphones and computers which has been
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that decrease the potential of the
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of developing skills
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as hand
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writing
or painting, which is managed by a specific lobe of the
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control
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the imagination and
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. To sum up,
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technology
is affecting the
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of our
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since when they are compared with the
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children
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in the past, they were obligated to work using the unique tool
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available
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since they had
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not
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access to social media which decrease the
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development on specific areas that affect the
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they
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obligated to
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imagine
and use
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their
own hands in order to complete their assignations.
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  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
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  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
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  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
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