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Global warning is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what Measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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Over the years, different parts of the world have been experiencing atmospheric changes.
This
 essay will discuss the major causes of climate change and possible solutions to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, pollution has been a major problem ever since mankind started living on
this
 planet.
This
 damage to the environment has been mainly
due to
 the emission of greenhouse gasses and improper waste disposal by manufacturers.
For instance
, the melting of the glaciers in different parts is being reported nowadays
due to
 heatwaves.
This
 is a consequence of hazardous substances released into the atmosphere by industries causing global warming.
On the other hand
, the government and citizens have a crucial role to play in preventing climate change.
This
 can be done by imposing laws that prohibit
disposing
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 of waste products into the environment by companies.
Furthermore
, the planting of trees by citizens must be encouraged.
This
 is because plants absorb toxic gases
such
 as carbon dioxide released into the air from the combustion of hydrocarbons.
Secondly
, overexploitation of natural resources by people for their own benefit is one of the major causes of climate change. When humans want to artificially transform the land,
for instance
, to build houses and roads, they do so by cutting down trees.
For
this
 reason, many (tree)species die leading to the expansion of deserts.
However
, to counteract
this
 problem city planning by local authorities is important to protect areas where human activity is limited and assign specific land for infrastructure development. I
To sum up
, two of the major causes of global warming are environmental contamination and deforestation.
Nevertheless
, counterbalancing of these issues can be achieved by afforestation and limiting human activities on the environment.
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task response
The essay provides a generally appropriate response to the task, addressing both causes of climate change and suggested measures. However, the development of ideas and arguments could be more thorough and the essay could benefit from a clearer and more organized structure.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a reasonable level of coherence and cohesion through the use of linking words and phrases. However, there are instances of unclear progression of ideas and some underdeveloped arguments. A more organized and logical flow of ideas is needed.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • severity
  • urgency
  • greenhouse effect
  • human-induced
  • deforestation
  • fossil fuel combustion
  • industrial pollution
  • environmental regulations
  • emission standards
  • renewable energy sources
  • green technologies
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • energy consumption
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • eco-friendly
  • extreme weather conditions
  • biodiversity
  • economic stability
  • collective responsibility
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