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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter •say which part-time course you booked •explain why you need to cancel your booking •ask about booking a different course You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Mr. George, I am writing
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 letter to request the cancellation of my current part-time course and transfer to the full-time
program
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. My name is Vairag Patel, I am registered as the programmer analyst for the weekend batch. My main motive for
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 transfer is that I previously worked at an MNC during the weekdays, which made the weekend batch suitable for me.
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, my circumstances have completely changed. My parents have suggested that I focus on my studies and finish
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program
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 under the fast track course and they will help me financially . After considering multiple research and advice from my seniors I have decided to transition from a part-time curriculum to a full-time
program
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, by involved in the fast-track course fosters me to focus completely on my studies and, ultimately allows me to improve better understanding and will complete the
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 in just 6 months
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 of a year. I kindly request you to consider my application and approve my transfer. I look forward to your response. Yours Sincerely, Vairag Patel.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear and logical structure. For example, it would help to separate your intentions to cancel and request a different course into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Try to be more explicit when stating your reasons for wanting to change courses. This can help reinforce your points.
task achievement
Your letter maintains an overall polite tone, which is very appropriate for correspondence with a college administrator.
coherence and cohesion
You provide specific details about your current course and your request, which adds clarity to your communication.
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