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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Due to successive waves of globalization and the massively booming advanced technology , it is rarely seen that the young generation spends their
time
on
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reading
newspapers
 or watching
news
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 on TV.
Consequently
 ,
this
 issue has sparked public attention from
time
 to
time
 . In
this
 essay , I will discuss the root causes of
this
 and propose alternative solutions respectively.
To begin
 with , there are many reasons why young people are not interested in paying attention
on
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newspapers
 and TV
news
 .
Firstly
 , since the turn of the 21st Century , almost every
youngsters
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 like to spend their precious
time
by
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wasting on social media
such
 as Facebook , YouTube and Tik Tok .
In addition
 , they become hectic by playing online games .
Accordingly
 , either reading or watching
news
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 becomes a boring concern for them , and they do not want to put aside their
time
 on that matter. Admittedly , there are many ways to solve those problems. And , teachers and parents play a crucial role in
this
 circumstance.
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 of all , family members have the main responsibility to restrain
on
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children’s social media usage and should allow them within a
time
 limit .
Furthermore
 , as children totally appeal to the reward , parents can entice them to read
newspapers
.
Likewise
, teachers should give homework or assignments relating to the subject of the current affair or history so that youth have to search data from
newspapers
 or TV
news
, inevitably. Having
consideration
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 of both causes and proposed solutions , there are likely to have some difficulties with
regards
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 to mitigating social media usage in
this
 contemporary epoch.
However
 , it can be successfully achieved with the help of teachers and parents.
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