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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a “fat tax” is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Due to the negative effects of consuming unhealthy meals on the person or even on society, some individuals argue that the government should impose a high duty on unhealthy
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 while others think that
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 idea would create some new issues. I strongly agree with the former idea .
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 with, one way to reduce the negative effect of an unhealthy diet is by imposing a higher tax on convenience
food
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 industries. With a higher levy, the price of
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food
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 would increase significantly.
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, some countries take a higher tax on cigarettes in order to reduce the number of sales as well as the
people
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 who consume them.  
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, collecting more duty from the fast-
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 restaurant could impact the restaurant and
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 their employees. The increase in the price tends to reduce the number of buyers.
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, some restaurants would not survive during the implementation of
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 program.
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 to that, many
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 who work in
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 industry would be fired from their occupation and create a new problem for society as well as the country.
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, the authorities might reduce the impact by giving a lower contribution to the healthy
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 industries and socialising their
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 about the importance of a healthy diet. To summarize, in order to mitigate the impact of unhealthy meals for both individuals and society as a whole, the executive could tax fast
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 industries at a high rate to decrease the amount
people
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 who go to eat at the quick-service restaurant.
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