Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Companies have started to invest more into marketing nowadays. A few believe, catchy advertisements are encouraging
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to purchase commodities that they are least interested in, and
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believe that nobody pays attention
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them. I would like to state my opinion on both statements. On one hand, marketing geeks are well-versed with human thinking methods. Colour, music, discount, font, popular celebrity and the correct timing are
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checkpoints that they consider while publishing advertisements.
Consequently
,
people
are bound to think that they should either purchase an item or opt for that service.
Moreover
, mass media, pamphlets, radio, and developing AI techniques that
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human constantly, are resulting
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a look
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those attractive display.
For instance
, say Walmart, uses all the possible means during Christmas to advertise
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the upcoming mega sale,
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attracts thousands of customers and results in boosting their sales.
On the other hand
, exceptional cases like scientists and researchers, or even
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common
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a waste of time. Some
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they play with
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mind and cause a distraction.
People
who are focused on their paths, do not get distracted by these
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.
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, if there is a promotion of
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commodity
then
people
try to switch off their devices or mute it for some time just to avoid it. In my opinion,
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should be smart enough to pick their own choice. They should not come under the influence of any promotion or advertisement. Watching it one time should be enough rather than doing unnecessary research on it. In my conclusion, companies are increasing their sales and earning profits from these
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while some
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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