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Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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In our century humans have become more
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, and it is caused by several things.I believe that it is not as big a problem as we can though.In
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 we will find the main source of
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 global problem and give advice to people on which way to solve it. Actually,life has become much more difficult than
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 illnesses around the globe. Stress has become a problem in today’s world because of increased job load and poor diet. It can be solved by having a balanced
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-life routine and improving dietary habits.Going into detail,we should have
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,that you like.In fact,many people
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 less,than they need,cause of
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 factor they don’t have energy all day,and when human sleeps less,they will be very
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.Indeed,
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 less important thing,it’s diet,our organism
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 healthy food,so we’ll have happy feelings all day.Many scientists proved
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 fact,because,when we eat fast foods,our stomachs don’t
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 properly,that’s why we have
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 pains and always want to sleep.
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 protein.What can we say about how
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 can be unhealthy and stressful? When people
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 more than they can,they might be tired.They won’t have productive days
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and will be stressed. In
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 I want to give you advice, you need to know your limits.
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 you’ll have an efficient and productive lifestyle.
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