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The average standard of people is a likely to be lower in future then it is now. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement and give one reason for your answers and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or explanation.

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In the present ,time
people
's physical strength is lower compared to future times. I Completely agree with the statement and there are many reasons for
this
 situation. My inclination will be justified in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with , the main reason for the situation is the advancement of technology.
This
 is because due to the technical evaluation
people
's
work
 can make lesser because of the machinery
work
 increase and physical
work
 decrease.
As a result
, they will develop serious because
people
 need to be physical
work
 if they become fit and find and inhibit their organs.
Additionally
 , another reason is that
people
 lower their diet habits. Nowadays
people
 use to eat more fast
food
 compared to homemade
food
. It is to say,
this
food
 contains more fats and cholesterol which affect human organs and make more diseases health issues liver and kidneys problem.
For example
, medical data from
last
 year conducted that 40% of
people
 stated that the main reason behind illness is an unhealthy diet. If they do not have fat they feel good and leave a happy life. In conclusion , a few decades ago,
people
 were very fit and fine
than
Replace the word
then
show examples
 now .I agree with the statement and the reasons are eating unhealthy
food
 and technical advancement.
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