In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

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Conventional wisdom says that smoking is injurious to health. Many nations have banned it in public areas. For the benefit of non-smokers, I agree that smokers should leave the premises and indulge in
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activity at designated locations only.
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with, it is widely known that passive smoking causes a detrimental effect on life. The smoke released by a smoker is mostly inhaled by nearby persons who are not actually smoking.
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, if a group of ten friends are sitting in a canteen and only a single person is consuming a cigarette,
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it is more likely that three to five persons who are sitting next to him would absorb the tobacco emitted by him.
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,
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bad habit of someone could be responsible for ruining the lives of others.
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using an allotted smoking zone, a smoker not only enjoys his habit but
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somewhat sensitive to others. The one who desires to inhale tobacco should leave the publicly surrounded places and do their thing in the reserved area which can aid in saving the lungs of many innocent humans. To illustrate, the majority of airports and business centres have smoking rooms where smokers can go and enjoy their time without affecting the health of others.
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, walking out of the building
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smoking would be a
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life for peers.
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, many people
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a habit of smoking;
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, they should not do it when they have other people nearby. To restrain smoking in public, many countries have brought publicly smoking under the law. I agree that one should try to avoid it in crowded locations and whenever they want to do it, they should leave the place and use special rooms for it.
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Ensure that the introduction clearly states the opinion on the topic and provides a roadmap of the essay. The conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the opinion.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay in a more logical structure with clear topic sentences for each paragraph. Use transition words and phrases to connect ideas and improve overall coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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