Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
A continuous improvement in
education
Add an article
the education
system
is necessary to produce better results. Some hold the view that authorities
should reduce the educational and financial requirements to take admission in
universities for those with countryside Change preposition
to
background
; however
, I disagree to grant admissions to students
on quota
basis.
Add an article
a quota
Sense
of competition will be lost in Correct article usage
A sense
society
by implementing this
system
. It means that students
would not work hard to achieve higher grades to get enrolled and they will wait for the announcement of seats from concerned authorities
based on their background
. In this
way
only average Add a comma
,way
students
will get positions in difficult courses and they will not be able to perform better in further
career
.
Fix the agreement mistake
careers
Furthermore
, egalitarian
Correct article usage
an egalitarian
society
is the requirement of modern
age. Only those communities could Add an article
the modern
Add a missing verb
be prosperous
prosperous
in which individuals enjoy equal rights. Replace the word
prosper
Policy makers
, Correct your spelling
Policymakers
therefore
, must consider education
Correct article usage
the education
system
along with other policies as well to create harmony among
Change preposition
in
society
.
A continuous improvement in education
Add an article
the education
system
is necessary to produce better results. Some hold the view that authorities
should reduce the educational and financial requirements to take admission in
universities for those with countryside Change preposition
to
background
; however
, I disagree to grant admissions to students
on quota
basis.
Add an article
a quota
Sense
of competition will be lost in Correct article usage
A sense
society
by implementing this
system
. It means that students
would not work hard to achieve higher grades to get enrolled and they will wait for the announcement of seats from concerned authorities
based on their background
. In this
way
only average Add a comma
,way
students
will get positions in difficult courses and they will not be able to perform better in further
career
.
Fix the agreement mistake
careers
Furthermore
, egalitarian
Correct article usage
an egalitarian
society
is the requirement of modern
age. Only those communities could Add an article
the modern
Add a missing verb
be prosperous
prosperous
in which individuals enjoy equal rights. Replace the word
prosper
Policy makers
, Correct your spelling
Policymakers
therefore
, must consider education
Correct article usage
the education
system
along with other policies as well to create harmony among
Change preposition
in
society
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