Nowadays many parents are sending their kids abroad to acquire good education. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of this trend. Give your own opinion.

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our life.In the present day many
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younger
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to foreign for higher
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parents.I will discuss the
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paragraphs with my opinion. On one hand ,
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education
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system is totally different from our country.
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system is important for
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life.
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countries are believe in
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practical
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must learn about
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field.
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they can balance their life by themselves an account of , the person who
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abroad they live alone so they have to manage all
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like study, job as well as chores of home, so they
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area without any support.
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in abroad they leave
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friends and family members so at that time they feel alone.
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young
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in
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depression or stress so
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drawback is inflation.We know about foreign countries like London, Dubail is
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expensive countries.
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people
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costly to enjoy that kind of culture and festival. According to my opinion, young
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must go in abroad for
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and secure future due to there
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number
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of resources for
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increase
our growth. To conclude, foreign culture and
education
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is
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beneficial for young
peole
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people
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