Topic: some people say that in all levels of education from primary schools to universities too much time is spend on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that
students
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in different levels of
education
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are forced to devote much time and energy to learning theoretical lessons which are not basically useful after graduation
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I
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with
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notion. In my view, each subject like science, chemistry and so on comprises practical and learning facts sections and both of them are interrelated and interdependent. Due to the fact that practical skills are on the basis of theoretical parts,
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students
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need to acquire somewhat
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knowledge but it seems that
conventional
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education
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system is being run in our schools and universities
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not consider equal consistency between both
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them. Unfortunately,
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system is designed to focus simply on reading and memorizing useless information. Undoubtedly, when graduated
students
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are ready to enter
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the labor
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labor
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market and apply for
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occupation relevant to their fields, they are unemployable and have no desirable
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consequently
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they are led to do grunt work and even if someone succeeds to find a good job the sooner the later he will lose it due to lack of adequate practical experience.
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, a vivid example of
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issue is that I remember that during
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high school my teachers always pressurized
students
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to memorize numerous formulas and statistics in order to pass our exams.
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I learned them, none of them
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never
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been used and I can’t remember even
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of them .in my perspective, it was
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waste of time and
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the method are still being followed. In conclusion, the importance of
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hands-on
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hands- on
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experience should be noticed as the top priority for all
education
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systems because it
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the chance of getting
a fulfilling jobs
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a fulfilling job
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.
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, holding workshops
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all levels is one of the perfect and ideal
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for upgrading
education
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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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