Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of infornation should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

The
media
is the place to transmit
information
that needs to be noticed in a day to the
people
, one of the most noticed news is articles with
information
about
criminals
. There are some
people
who believe that the detailed depiction of crime
information
and images in newspapers and TV will cause
bad
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influence and that these forms of communication should be limited. But in my
view
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I disagree with that opinion and
this
essay will give arguments to prove my point.
To begin
with, when a broadcaster publishes an article related to
criminals
,
people
will panic and it will be worse when they do not know the image of that criminal. Fears arise when
residents
know they are living with offenders but do not know exactly who they are and that directly affects the morale of the
people
living near the crime scene.
People
's work performance can be affected by
mental
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decline.
Therefore
the
media
should describe the
criminals
in detail to avoid
residents
' fear of causing undue psychological influence.
Besides
, if the newspapers only report the cases but they don't tell
people
about the culprit, it will cause riots targeting innocent
people
. The
actions
of the
perpetrator
can lead to hatred of the
people
, but the
residents
are not able to know the image of the
perpetrator
, which will make them suspicious of each other and lead to fights.
For example
, a murder case is published in the
media
, the
perpetrator
's
actions
make
people
hate him, but they do not know his exact
information
. That makes them suspicious of
people
whose
actions
they consider to be unusual and
then
they want to arrest
people
they think are
criminals
to
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the police station, it would be potentially more dangerous if the
people
directly beat the person. In short, the
media
should give important
information
about the
perpetrator
to avoid
fear
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of
residents
.
Besides
, in my opinion, broadcasters may not post too detailed
information
about the
perpetrator
's criminal
actions
to avoid bad influence.
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