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In recent years, pressure on school and university students has been increasing and they are pushed to work very hard from a young age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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A considerable proportion of
students
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 and their
parents
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, in
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 present-day society, cannot help complaining that
students
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 are suffering from incredible
stress
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 in schools and colleges. It seems that they only focus on some possibly adverse outcomes of
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, but ignore the potential advantages.
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 off, almost all
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 in
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 day and age are being surrounded by a whole variety of distractions like online games and hit TV dramas.
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,
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 of a young age often lack self-control, which implies that their
study
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 can be more negatively impacted. The proper
pressure
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 given by their teachers or
parents
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 is able to greatly help them get rid of those unnecessary disturbances.
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, under proper
pressure
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, those
students
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 can be highly motivated and their study efficiency can be substantially enhanced. On top of
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,
students
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 studying under constant
pressure
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 can gain skills to cope with
stress
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. Those skills will certainly play irreplaceable and significant roles in their future life and career. Without any doubt, every student will
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 go out into the world and will be confronted with far more
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 than they used to face in school. At that point, there is not enough time for them to get accustomed to it, unless they have already been trained for living with proper
pressure
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. Contrarily, excessive
pressure
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 will definitely bring those
students
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 some negative results
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 as insomnia, anxiety and even depression. In fact, both teachers and
parents
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 can control
students
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’ level of
stress
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, and assist them to relieve the
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 scientifically and reasonably. Admittedly, neither studying in a
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-free environment nor an undue
pressure
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 environment is a rational choice for
students
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. In summary,
students
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 will meet
pressure
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 in their lives sooner or later, so being plagued by a certain amount of
stress
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 in schools and colleges seems more acceptable and positive for
students
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 as they can tackle all of the hardships with useful guidance from teachers and
parents
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. If not, how arduous their future life might be is beyond our imagination.
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