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In some countries, more and more adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In some nations, more
people
 are living with their
parents
 even after their graduation and getting jobs.
This
 essay will discuss positive aspects
such
 as assistance to their father and mother, and negative aspects
such
 as lost privacy and dependent life.
People
 are very keen
with
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 their mom and dad, the more current generation still look after their family even though, they got
a
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better job. Because of
this
 attitude, the community will be balanced, if not elderly
people
 have to take care
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 others, it may lead them to mental illness. And
also
 children could easily help their
parents
 physically and financially.
For instance
, I have been with my mother since I got my
first
 job and
able
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 to assist with her day to day activities, actually, it gives me
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great feeling and I have self-satisfaction as well. I believe that we have to be with our
parents
 because it is our responsibility too. Few
people
 feel that they are depending on their relatives and losing their privacy because usually father and grandparents would advise
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 every new step in our life which may lead us to lose our self-confidence.
In addition
, we may not able to be with our friends because our
parents
 will
usmonitor
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monitor
us monitor
. For ,example my mother instantly checked my Facebook account, it has been annoying to me and I really do not know why does she do ? In conclusion, younger society is staying with their
parents
 in many nations. While students who live with their
parents
 can be able to take care of them ,
however
, they would not be independent. As far as my opinion, even though children live away from their families, they should be responsible to their families as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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