In some countries, more and more adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In some nations, more
people
are living with their
parents
even after their graduation and getting jobs.
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such
as assistance to their father and mother, and negative aspects
such
as lost privacy and dependent life.
People
are very keen
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their mom and dad, the more current generation still look after their family even though, they got
a
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better job. Because of
this
attitude, the community will be balanced, if not elderly
people
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others, it may lead them to mental illness. And
also
children could easily help their
parents
physically and financially.
For instance
, I have been with my mother since I got my
first
job and
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to assist with her day to day activities, actually, it gives me
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great feeling and I have self-satisfaction as well. I believe that we have to be with our
parents
because it is our responsibility too. Few
people
feel that they are depending on their relatives and losing their privacy because usually father and grandparents would advise
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every new step in our life which may lead us to lose our self-confidence.
In addition
, we may not able to be with our friends because our
parents
will
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monitor
us monitor
. For ,example my mother instantly checked my Facebook account, it has been annoying to me and I really do not know why does she do ? In conclusion, younger society is staying with their
parents
in many nations. While students who live with their
parents
can be able to take care of them ,
however
, they would not be independent. As far as my opinion, even though children live away from their families, they should be responsible to their families as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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