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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern time, capital
punishment
 is highly
contraversial
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controversial
 in
country
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the country
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. Some are of the view
that is
 the best way to punish. From my point of view, I totally agree that it is not good for a
country
.
This
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as
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 the following. There are many reasons why
this
punishment
 is not appropriate.
First
 of all, every human deserves a
second
 chance because everyone makes mistakes and a good person is
who
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one who
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 will learn from their mistake.
For example
, children who used to steal some money from other people
and
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also
 learn that
this
behavior
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 is not good and they will never do it again.
Secondly
, it reflects the bad character of the
country
 to the world.
This
 can lead to problems of economic benefit. Aa as
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, when tourists know that they will avoid going to places where they do not feel safe or places that have a bad image in the world.
As a result
,
this
 significantly
lead
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 to
loss
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the loss
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 of the economy. every human deserves a
second
 chance because everyone makes mistakes and a good person is
who
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one who
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 will learn from their mistake.
For example
, children who used to steal some money from other people
and
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apply
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also
 learn that
this
behavior
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behaviour
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 is not good and they will never do it again.
On the other hand
, some people suppose that the government should use capital
punishment
 in their
country
. The reason why the government should do
that is
because
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 crime has increased more than in the past.
Moreover
, the criminal must be punished for
its
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their
his
her
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 acts, so the victims get fair justice. Death and
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lifetime
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life time
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lifetime
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 jialing
are
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is
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 necessary if someone proves
guilt
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.
Hence
,
this
punishment
 can reduce the crime rate. In conclusion, if someone breaks the law, they must be punished for their fault.
However
,
by
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the
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second
 chance, they will improve yourselves and
also
 can learn about the consequences of
wrong
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wrongdoings
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doings
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doing
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.
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