«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

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Most
people
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expect that
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should pay out more
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on sports provisions for top athletes. Others contend that
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money
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should
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for
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sports facilities for normal
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.
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hand
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government should expend funds
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sport
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,
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apply
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because these days a lot of
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choose
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sport
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a sport
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.
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why they are fond of it and they want to be
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a win
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in the
olimpics
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Olympics
. It is very interesting for them. So they demand
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more
money
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for
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sport
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facilities.
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most
people
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do not want to split up
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for
sport
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, because they do not like sports facilities. Though they always request to give
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money
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for
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ordinary and poor
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. They prefer to pay out for helpless
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rather than
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that government should spend more
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for
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both of them
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because in my view both of them
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the
money
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and the government are responsible for them. So the leadership divide
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money
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the money
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to
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into
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sport
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and poor
people
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if they need how much
money
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.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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