«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

Most
people
expect that
administration
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should pay out more
money
on sports provisions for top athletes. Others contend that
this
money
should
be spend
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be spent
be spending
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for
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on
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sports facilities for normal
people
.
On the other
hand
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government should expend funds
for
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on
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sport
,
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apply
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because these days a lot of
youngs
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young
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choose
sport
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a sport
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.
That is
why they are fond of it and they want to be
win
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a win
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in the
olimpics
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Olympics
. It is very interesting for them. So they demand
for
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apply
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more
money
for
sport
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sports
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facilities.
On the other
hand
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most
people
do not want to split up
money
for
sport
, because they do not like sports facilities. Though they always request to give
these
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this money
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money
for
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to
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ordinary and poor
people
. They prefer to pay out for helpless
people
rather than
sport
. In conclusion, it seems to me that government should spend more
money
for
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on
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both of them
,
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apply
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because in my view both of them
desperate
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are desperate
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the
money
and the government are responsible for them. So the leadership divide
money
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the money
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to
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into
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sport
and poor
people
if they need how much
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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