Media nd news show crimes and news which case fear and provoke culprit.Some people think that crime news on tv should not be broadcasted. To wat extent do you agree or disagree.

Mass communication show unlawful acts on
television
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cause unpleasant feelings and anger in
offenders
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.Other
people
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believe that unlawful acts on
television
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should not be aired .In my opinion ,I disagree that unlawful acts should not be broadcasted.
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, they should because it will alert
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society about what is happening. To a lesser extent , crime news should not be broadcasted.
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is because it causes unpleasant feelings and
instigate
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offenders
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.Many
people
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are not comfortable watching bad things on tv,it promotes instant fear and uncomfortable situation.Broadcasting crime on
television
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it
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makes
offenders
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angry because they don't like to
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be exposed
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exposed
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.
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, when there was a bank robbery ,and they managed to escape ,they get angry because they are looking for them.
On the other hand
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, to a greater extent crimes should be broadcasted because the
people
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should be alerted about what is happening around them
,
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so that they will take extra
precaution
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.Broadcasting on
television
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for
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example, a wanted person ,
people
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will know that someone dangerous is on the loose.
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, everyone is going to be alert. In my opinion,crime news should be aired because it will notify
people
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about
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what is happening around them. In conclusion,mass communication causes unpleasant feelings and
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makes
offenders
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to
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be angry .

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