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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts compare how the latest information is broadcasted in two countries, Australia and Canada.
Overall
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, both countries have similar patterns but with slight differences in how the
news
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 is transmitted. In general, Canadians access
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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information mainly through television accounting for 40%.
By contrast
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, Australians prefer to surf the Internet as a principal way to get the
news
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, with more than half of the proportion, at 52%. One significant difference is represented by data related to print copies, where it was 14% and half of
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 value in Australia. Another considerable difference is noticed in getting the
news
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 on the radio: in fact, 7% of the Canadian inhabitants prefer to
listen
Add the preposition
tolisten

The phrase following the intransitive verb listen seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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 radio, compared to the Australian population with a value of only 2%. Only a mere percentage of people did not specify the source of
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

news
Correct article usage
the news

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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. In conclusion, it can be observed that going online and watching television are the most preferred ways of accessing the
news
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 compared to other systems of transmission.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words news with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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