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news editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspaper. what factors do you think influence their decision? Do we used to bed news ? would it be better if more good news was reported ?

#news #editors #broadcast #television #print #newspaper #factors #influence #decision
Numerous
news
 that we see or hear
in
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 TV or
newspaper
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are
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 edited by
news
 editors
in
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 many reasons. In my opinion,
the
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news
 effectiveness and profitability are more prominent. It is
may
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 view that there are several factors
which
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 have a significant effect on selecting a TV programme and a papers' subject. One of the most important
reseans
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reasons
 is the widespread influence of media on thoughts.
sometime
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this
 impact is positive and
sometime
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 is vice versa.
For example
, often
news
 editors have a strong connection with politicians in order to yield their policy goals or they cooperate with some companies for refusing to publish bad facts about them. I
further
 believe that
unfortunately
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 the number of negative
news
are
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 increasing in the world
as a result
, these
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newscasts
newcasts
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 have an adverse effect on community mental health and not only do people used to them
also
 they are more likely to feel depressed.
moreover
, in
this
 current time, humans always spend most of their time
for
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reading and watching announcements
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therefore
 negative facts are often presented in
initial
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 part of television programmes or
fist
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first
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 page of papers because it
absorb
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 more audiences but I think if
news
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 reported good events more, it would boost social happiness.
Hence
, publishments with regard to
this
 issue should present more
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 subjects. In conclusion, media editors can make a vital decision about what facts should be released or not?
also
 from my perspective, we should be aware of
good
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the good
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 and bad
impact
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impacts
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 on our
mental
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minds
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.
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