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Governments should spend more on railways than on roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #railways #roads
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It is thought by
people
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 that government should spend more money on
railways
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 than on roads. If we take a survey, of course, most
people
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 will support the idea due to
railways
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 are more suitable for moving a large number of citizens in huge cities or for transportation. I
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 think that much more money should be spent on the development of the
railways
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 or the underground. Nowadays, there is an issue with overpopulation in developed countries
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 as the USA. Because the more humanity develops itself, the population increase.
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, standards of life have grown over the
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 decade and it continues to do, so the number of elder
people
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 increase dramatically. There is no doubt to say that the underground is comfortable for most of the population. Probably, the government would make a good impact if they do their best to improve the
railways
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' infrastructure. On the other side of the coin, clearly built roads let
people
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 use their cars in the right way, not having problems with traffic jams or terrible areas. It is
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 understandable that owning a car in some cases is more practicable. When someone is really busy he or she would be better to use the car. In conclusion, I would like to say that investment in the
railways
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 could boost countries' transport infrastructure better. I do believe the government will consider
railways
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 improvements in the future.
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