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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#believe #weapons #benefit #world
Although
 these days many pursue international peace, there
are
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 a myriad
of
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countries
which
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 have nuclear
weapons
. Some said
say
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 that the
weapons
 are beneficial for the
world
,
however
, others believe that nuclear
weapons
 have negative impacts on the
world
 rather than advantages.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of view
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this
 argument and elaborate my perspective in the following paragraphs before leading to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, those who are in
favor
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 of possession of nuclear
weapons
 argue that having the
weapons
 is one of the means of defending their own
countries
. To be exact, if a country
which
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own
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 nuclear
weapons
use
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 them, it would derive
on
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 the worst situations,
therefore
, many
countries
 are
challenging
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 to attack nations which are possessing
that
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that weapon
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weapons
.
For example
, even though North Korea, one of the
countries
 which are possessing nuclear
weapons
, is smaller and weaker than its near
countries
, that country is
protecting
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 from nearby nations
such
 as China, South Korea, Russia and so forth.
Accordingly
,
the
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nuclear
weapons
 can prohibit
from
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other
countries'
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countries
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attack
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.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that
the
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nuclear
weapons
 are double-edged swords. Some believe that in
21st
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 century, most
countries
 make an effort to maintain
peaceful
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world
 and even possession of nuclear
weapons
 can blow massive bad effects on the
world
.
For instance
, not only
using
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 nuclear
weapons
 exert harmful influence
in
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human
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 body but
also
countries
which
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that
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 attacked with the
weapons
 would be much worse than before, suffering from economic and diplomatic problems from other
countries
.
Therefore
, nuclear
weapons
 will surely be international problematic issues. In conclusion, nuclear
weapons
 can protect
from
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other
countries
,
however
,
those
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 can have adverse effects on many parts
in
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 the
world
. In my opinion, in
21st
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 century with peace and love, nuclear
weapons
 should disappear and if there are some conflicts between
countries
, they must alleviate issues wisely without violence.
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