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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
Nowadays, the
quality
 of
life
 in metropolises
are
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is
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 dropping.
This
 essay will discuss the causes
to
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of
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this
 problem and present some possible solutions. Sound and
air
quality
 pollution greatly lower the
quality
 of
city
life
. Excessive
noise
,
such
 as car honking, people shouting and construction workers drilling can make
city
 dwellers feel extremely stressed and annoyed, which can lower productivity and make
life
 less enjoyable. Polluted
air
, usually the consequence of too many cars and smoking in the public, can
also
 have a huge toll on the human body, causing diseases that
last
 for an extended period of time. These 2 factors make living in a
city
 very unattractive. The
above mentioned
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 problems are not without possible solutions. Governments have a huge role to play when addressing the issue of sound pollution. Bills can be passed to fine anyone who
honk
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 in residential areas to reduce the effect in
which
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noise
 can have on residents.
This
 has been the case for many provinces in China, and the method seems to be effective. When dealing with the issue of bad
air
quality
, multiple steps need to be taken.
First
, more plants and vegetation must be planted in order to absorb the exhaust fumes released by vehicles. The government of Beijing increased the
amount
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 of trees in urban areas, and
air
quality
 was significantly raised.
Next
, citizens must be encouraged to use public transport or use environment-friendly methods of travel. Carbon emissions caused by cars will decline steeply. To conclude, the main factors causing an unpleasant
city
life
 are
noise
 and
air
 pollution. Bills and fines can be utilized to reduce
noise
, while tree planting and encouraging citizens to use alternative methods of transport can successfully address the issue of bad
air
quality
.
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