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Band 5.5

An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •Recommend the best time of year to visit and why – •Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose •Say what you would like to show your friend in your country

#friend #visit #country #holiday #•recommend #time #year #•describe #accommodation #•say #show
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Dear Mark, I hope all is well with you. I’m glad that you will be coming to
visits
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visit
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 my country. I would suggest you arrange your flights
in
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apply
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between June and August as my country has special festivals, which
attracts
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attract
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 many international tourists.
Furthermore
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, it is summer here during these seasons so you can have an opportunity to stay at
beach
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the beach
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. It would be great if you could choose a hotel near to suan beach, which has a great view
to
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of
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 the city. The hotel has several compliments
such
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 as free breakfast and dinner for international people like you.
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, it is
also
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safest
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the safest
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 hotel to stay
as
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in as
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 it has
24 hours
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24-hour
 surveillance
camera
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cameras
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. I’m so eager to catch up with you and show
a
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you a
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few historical places in my country
such
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 as the statue of our great fathers and
national
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the national
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 museum.
Moreover
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, I plan to show you a national
zoom
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, which has endemic animals like lions and blue tigers. I am looking forward to catching up with you soon. Best regards, Tes
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Grammar
Make sure to thoroughly proofread your letter for any minor grammatical errors, such as verb agreement and articles usage.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the letter is generally clear and structured well, ensure each paragraph has a focused idea. For example, avoid combing discussing the hotel view and safety measures in the same sentence.
Tone
The tone of the letter is friendly, which is suitable for a letter to a friend.
Greeting and Closing
The letter opens and closes appropriately with a greeting and closing remark that enhance the overall coherence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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