The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activitis which usually involve very little risk To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Radio, TV and
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have to reduce
bad
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the bad
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information
they tell
people
because they could make them
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disappointed
to do normal
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. In general, most
news
which is
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heard
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in hole-
world
contain
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important
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happened
happens
happen
that
people
want to know. While
,
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desiring to know new data cause media make attempt to publish
somtimes
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sometimes
masked
information
.
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,
this
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on crowd's life but they should
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reckon because if they concealed data from society, freedom might be
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impacted
. So,
news
should be available
for
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every person in the
world
,
however
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they have bad effects.
In addition
, a great deal of importance is
news
can prepare pupils
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bad situations.
For example
, when two or more
goverments
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governments
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had
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conflicts
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in
a
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area of
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,
people
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follow
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news
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to find the best way to save themselves.
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to had
news
could be disappointed and make
man
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unhappy. In fact,
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following
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fallowing
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news
may cause
people
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a decision
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decision
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decisions
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.
For instance
, terrible
information
about
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state
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can cause
man
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a man
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will not purchase
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a suitable
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house.
Besides
,
people
should find the best way to use
information
.
However
, most of us are used to hearing
news
without any reactions unless they are attractive
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us. But
to
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doing so is numerously becoming
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increase
over 20 years and it would be perilous in future. In conclusion, it seems in
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world
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not,
people
hear a
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considerable
amount of bad
news
. whereas we obligate to find
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way to use them. Because the
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without it.
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